Pack your Bags Millennials

http://thefederalist.com/2015/08/03/yo-millennials-move-in-with-your-parents-and-youll-lose-at-life/

 

blog-post-3-multimodal-elementThis is the author of the editorial, and the only multimodal element included in the entire article. I fell like he included this to make himself appear business-like or professional, so people would take him seriously.

Summary:

          This article was written for the federalist.com by author Philip Wegmann. It discusses the problem that more and more millennials are refusing to leave home and start their own lives. He then talks about why this is a very big issue for society, the parents, and the young adults. He ends with a call to action to get more individuals to move out of their parents’ home.

Claim #1: While it’s not good for man to live alone, it’s even worse for him to live at home with his parents.

          Evidence: The author explained that although employment rates are still up, there is still a very large number of millennials remaining at home, and this reflected a widespread cultural regression. He also said that returning home perpetuated adolescence and there was no room for personal growth.

          Analysis: The author makes plenty of good points here that all relate back to this claim, but this article is void of any hard facts. This is very opinionated, so while it may be true to most individuals, it still cannot be seen as a fact. Further research does show that the number of young adults staying at home has risen significantly, but there were no sources I could find that say that employment rates has made any drastic improvements.

Claim #2: We should love our parents enough never to move back in with them.

          Evidence: The author backed up this claim by stating that parents might love us but not enough to have us stay at home forever. They really should not because in civil society their job is to foster maturity and prepare their children to eventually become an adult. He finished it by saying that we are robbing our parents of the reward of seeing their child become an adult and have a career.

          Analysis: This evidence definitely plays towards the emotion of the audience by showing that they are not doing their parents a favor by staying at home with them, and he is very successful in doing this. However, once again this claim has no actual facts or sources with facts that support his claim.

Claim #3: Living at Home Isn’t Cool

          Evidence: The first piece of evidence used was actually quoting Ryan Gosling who said, “Hey girl, want to come back to my parent’s place?”, and said that he could not even pull it off. He then also said that Winston Churchill said that “the spaces we occupy end up shaping us” and used this to say that living at our parents’ house at an old age is turning us back into children.

          Analysis: This was a very opinionated claim to begin with so it was not a surprise that the evidence was as well. While at first glance you may think he is referencing a movie or show that Ryan gosling used that line, with further research you can see that he is talking about a meme that people made up, meaning there was no response back showing that the line did not work. Even his quote from Churchill was rearranged to fit his purpose, but the actual quote is, “We shape our buildings therefore they shape us.” Once again this claim has no real support, and in no way does he back it up with any tangible facts.

Editorial Response Ideas:

          Attack the claims that he makes

          Highlight the fact that while he had good evidence for his claims they all lacked solid facts

          Show how he misused certain evidence to make it sound better for his paper

          Provide a better way he could have written the paper in order to complete the goal he set when he began to write it.

 

 

 

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2 Responses to Pack your Bags Millennials

  1. Nicholas Huang says:

    Your article definitely does feature a person who exudes a ridiculous amount of criticism, yet never backs it up. I like how you were able to break down his main points and do a legitimate analysis even though there was pretty much little to nothing to analyze (in terms of sources). He doesn’t even necessarily try to define the word cool. He simply just sort of sticks in this argument and try to build on it with little to no support. All in all, this editorial was a piece of erroneous work from the start. I feel like the writer was just having a bad day and decided to rant on whatever was getting on his nerves.

  2. Michael Farrante says:

    Good job directing this editorial. You mention a lot that he does not back his claims with hard evidence and that seems to be a general trend amongst most of these editorials. I like that you included his profile picture and mentioned how he used to make himself look more professional but I think in addition to your claim about why he used it, he uses it to show that he is a millennial as well. However I do agree with him somewhat that we millennials take advantage of our parents and that we should not use them as crutch forever and instead we need to make that leap of faith into adulthood at some point in our life.

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