Claim yourself ‘adulting’ if you’ve just began to take things seriously

Editorial:  How I learned to love “adulting” —the word, if not the act

 

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Claim 1:  ‘Part of being an adult is taking ownership of your mistakes, moving
on and doing everything in your power not to make them again.’

Analysis: The author’s claim is reasonable here, while the evidence she used is not supporting the claim. The story that she found her luggage back calmly seems to be relevant to correcting mistakes, but it shows little relation to ‘adulting’. Also, the author, ‘being 40’ as she mentioned, had just learned to how to find her stuffs back. This lack of ability puts her credibility for this topic in doubt after all.

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Claim 2: ‘ It’s okay to embrace that feeling, as long as we don’t devolve into actually ignoring what we should be doing in favor of what we wish we could be doing instead (unless it’s the weekend or a holiday or a mental health day).’

Analysis: The author made a lucid claim here: adults are allowed to feel lazy sometimes as long as they know they need to work hard. However, the evidence about author’s feeling simply shows the presence and commonness of this lazy feeling. It does not help arguing anything about the importance of doing ‘what we should do,’ nor showing that adults should not follow ‘what we wish we could be doing instead.’ It is another logical fallacy that the author made.

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Claim 3:  ‘I often feel like adulthood is more akin to playing whack-a-mole than anything else.’

Analysis: In this paragraph, the logic between claim and evidence is substantial. The author compared adulthood to playing whack-a-mole, which vividly described the multitasks adults need to face everyday. Then, the author listed a number of trifles to show how busy and annoying adulthood can be. The whole point is clear and is supported nicely.

 

Overall, it is an editorial that was developed based on the author’s personal experience since the article is about her own adaptation to the word. The photo included in this editorial is not pertinent, which may affect the credibility of this article. There are some quotations from other online publications, yet they all served as a introduction to the topic. Some of the arguments and logical and strongly supported, while the other has some problem making connection in between claim and argument. Some personal anecdotes and the final conclusion makes the author seem not quite an adult yet. It is feasible to counter the author’s argument by pointing out her reasoning mistakes and immaturity.

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2 Responses to Claim yourself ‘adulting’ if you’ve just began to take things seriously

  1. Tianyi Liu says:

    Nicholas, your advice is really helpful. I did not realize that the ages can be a good point to argue with the accuracy of the data. Since there is not so many data included in this passage, I think I need to focus more on the logic between argument and evidence.

    About the claim 2, what I was trying to say is that there is not enough connection between saying that we should not ‘devolve into ignoring what we should be doing.’ and the evidence of the author’s regular feeling of unpreparedness. For example, using examples like ‘feeling unprepared and hence decided to do nothing for that day leads to a irretrievable outcome’ would be much more logically reasonable. The fact check about the first claim could be more relevant about the ‘Ad Hominem’ fallacy, but the author is trying to convince adult people to love the term ‘adulting’ while she herself is ‘adulting’ certainly late. I think it is ok to say that the author’s ethos is affected within this topic.

    Thanks for your advice!

  2. Nicholas Joaquin says:

    Tianyi, you’ve delved well into the fact checking of claims and evidence backing up claims. However, do keep in mind the following.

    1) A lot of your claims are ‘personal’ – that is, they are not exactly backed up by fact or number evidence, just anecdotes. Frankly, anecdotes as evidence is perfectly fine but what’s the basis of trusting an anecdote? Wouldn’t it be better if there was numbers that specifically stated that (looking at the third claim) breaking up at 16 is “harder” than it is at 26/36, rather than just anecdotal evidence? Consider looking at statistics and “data” in fact checking

    2) Speaking of ‘personal’ evidence, do be aware not to fall into the pitfall of the ‘Ad Hominem’ fallacy mentioned in Wednesday’s video class. This is especially hard to do given that the author of your editorial is not exactly the most “qualified” person to speak on the topic of adulting (comparing a blogger/writer on adult topics to, let’s say, a psychologist studying the transition between adulthood and childhood). I feel especially your evidence for claim 2, where you mention that her personal evidence does not back up her second claim, easily passing it off as a “logical fallacy.” Don’t fall into this trap of ‘Ad Hominem Fallacy,’ focus on what the argument has to say and rebut it with meaningful information and data.

    Overall, a good job.

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