Claim 1: ‘Part of being an adult is taking ownership of your mistakes, moving
on and doing everything in your power not to make them again.’
Analysis: The author’s claim is reasonable here, while the evidence she used is not supporting the claim. The story that she found her luggage back calmly seems to be relevant to correcting mistakes, but it shows little relation to ‘adulting’. Also, the author, ‘being 40’ as she mentioned, had just learned to how to find her stuffs back. This lack of ability puts her credibility for this topic in doubt after all.
Claim 2: ‘ It’s okay to embrace that feeling, as long as we don’t devolve into actually ignoring what we should be doing in favor of what we wish we could be doing instead (unless it’s the weekend or a holiday or a mental health day).’
Analysis: The author made a lucid claim here: adults are allowed to feel lazy sometimes as long as they know they need to work hard. However, the evidence about author’s feeling simply shows the presence and commonness of this lazy feeling. It does not help arguing anything about the importance of doing ‘what we should do,’ nor showing that adults should not follow ‘what we wish we could be doing instead.’ It is another logical fallacy that the author made.
Claim 3: ‘I often feel like adulthood is more akin to playing whack-a-mole than anything else.’
Analysis: In this paragraph, the logic between claim and evidence is substantial. The author compared adulthood to playing whack-a-mole, which vividly described the multitasks adults need to face everyday. Then, the author listed a number of trifles to show how busy and annoying adulthood can be. The whole point is clear and is supported nicely.
Overall, it is an editorial that was developed based on the author’s personal experience since the article is about her own adaptation to the word. The photo included in this editorial is not pertinent, which may affect the credibility of this article. There are some quotations from other online publications, yet they all served as a introduction to the topic. Some of the arguments and logical and strongly supported, while the other has some problem making connection in between claim and argument. Some personal anecdotes and the final conclusion makes the author seem not quite an adult yet. It is feasible to counter the author’s argument by pointing out her reasoning mistakes and immaturity.
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